Monday, December 3, 2018

The Most Important 250 Words You Will Ever Write! And it's not the blurb...

Hello again from the Canada! 

Hope everyone is ready for the big event in the not so distant future. I’m talking about Christmas, of course. A favorite time of the year. One of these years I’m going to write another Christmas story. I keep promising myself, but regular work gets in the way, eh!

In the meantime, I’ve been reading about crafting a story that draws readers in from the very first word. It’s said that you have 250 words to make an impression and entice readers to enter your story world. The number one need is getting the story to raise questions that arouse the curiosity. Then pour on the conflict! If YOU feel what your characters are going through, if you walk in their shoes, then your readers will too.
In my efforts to practice what I preach in a recent exercise, I’ve put together an opening of 249 words to demonstrate. Please share your own examples in the comment section. I'd love to hear from you!

This is from the Book, OUTSIDER CODE, a conspiracy thriller I’m just beginning to write:

Jackson Knight scanned the east ridge. An uneasiness roiled his gut. The Rocky Mountains surrounding him were stark gray giants, stretching out for hundreds of kilometers in all directions, seeming like a distant planet. He had plenty of the isolation he craved this morning, catching only brief glimpses of two skiers, a few minutes behind him. One a female, judging by clothing and finesse of movement.

He was about to cross a second slide path, climbing north along Balu Pass, moving parallel to the silver ribbon of water tracing the Connaught Creek Valley. It was a treacherous stretch, and he carried appropriate gear, including a 240-cm carbon probe, collapsible shovel and a transceiver. Nothing looked amiss, and he opened his backpack to remove his water bottle, taking a quick swig of its contents. He rubbed at the symbol etched into his chest, considering. Make me worthy.

Dynamite cracked the air. No human intervention had been planned according to Parks Canada, but something had gone wrong—horribly wrong. A massive avalanche thundered down Mount Cheops’s jagged face, a virtual wall of powder determined to wipe everything from the mountain.

He forced his legs to move with inhuman speed, not forward in the direction of the sane, but back toward the two skiers, frozen and staring at Armageddon. He had seconds to reach them before the snow slammed into the valley bottom and surged up toward them. Fluid at first, it would settle into concrete to bury him, and them. Alive.

Well, that’s all for this month. I wish y’all a very Happy Holiday Season! :-) 

Hugs, January
OPPS, almost forgot! My new book, Racing Peril is now available on Amazon! And for only 98 cents!

Revenge. Greed. Murder. And an insatiable passion...

When a drunk driver ends the life of her sister and her unborn child, Silk O’Connor resolves to take justice into her own hands.

Jake Marshall is a decorated soldier on leave, filling in for a friend at Sterling Security—and protecting the very man who used his car as a weapon and murdered Silk’s only family.

The two clash when Jake finds Silk preparing to mete out her own frontier-style brand of justice from the courthouse roof…and the adrenaline-fueled high-stakes world it ensnares the pair in will test them to their absolute limit.

It’s a fight for survival as they’re forced to team up to dispense justice on an international scale when thrust into the evil world of sex trafficking. With time running out for Silk and Jake, it just might be a fight to the death!
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1 comment:

Tina Donahue said...

Great post and excellent advice. I struggle over the first line of every book (and the first 250 words) so I can grab readers ASAP. :)